Kenpachi Masamune

LIES lies are silver. (Capitalize L) like scar tissue and spiders’ silk, (Caps L. Spider's (one spider)) strung and woven between the shoulder-blades. (Caps S. Shoulder blade) hidden under a ...

It kinda drags on and that seems to be its worst enemy. It tells a story, but I am not sure if that is what she was going for. Perhaps ...

It's very good, I like it. Though in the last bit you used the word vibration twice. I shudder with joy as each vibration Rings on forever in my mind ...

It rhymed and was sort of cute, but the subject was bland and rather boring. It was unoriginal and that made me look at it a little more harshly with ...

The introduction is terrible. Even Sailor Moon had a better introduction at the start of each episode. Though even that introduction was barely passable by current standards for 'My name ...

'done shoot' = don't shoot This was rather interesting with the flipping and sudden changes. Its an original style, but there is not much in terms of character development or ...

This poem did bring up memories, but the most disturbing aspects are how you captured this feeling of loss and disgust that comes with writing on yourself, piercings and the ...

Powerful and bold it works well with your spacing choices. Locker door creakingly opens revealing Creakingly is not a word. 'creaks open' maybe? Photograph of old, discarded and peeling face ...

Here I thought this would be a tribute to Poe's Raven, but I guess I was wrong. Little black raven, while cute, you make the bird seem actually rather nice. ...

Very good it flowed and was beautiful. One of the few poems I've seen so far to actually have a good word choice and flow with depth and not whine ...

Eek. This seemed to be a little rushed. While it was good in many parts like the early description of the Gate it would go way too fast after 'slipping ...

This was good, and I liked the imagery and especially the ending. It was sweet and flowed pretty well. Sappy only happens when it is done in bad taste, this ...

Sorry, but I must agree with the others on this one as well. It was a poetic rant and Overeasy said it first. At the very least could it not ...

Perverted, but rather disgusting in some parts. It is unflattering and really raunchy to describe a woman in such ways. "You’ll take a throbbing member And vomit later in sex ...

This is not poetry. This is just part of your diary. Even while this is not poetry, I can comment on your form. Lack of capitalization for I and new ...